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The personal pronoun, “you”, may not be appropriate for formal writing. Consider removing this pronoun, and rephrasing your sentence.

Formal writing should be impersonal, so personal pronouns – possessive or otherwise- are generally not used. Personal pronouns (i.e. I, you, we, my, mine, your, yours, our, ours) assume the information in your writing applies only to specific readers. By using impersonal pronouns (he, she, one, they, his, him, her, one’s, their), any reader may make their own personal connections to the information being discussed.

Hint: replace you, I and we with one, and replace my, mine, yours and ours with one’s.

Incorrect: When you add 3 and 4, you should get 7.
The personal pronoun, “you”, should not be used in formal writing.

The sentence may be rephrased so it remains impersonal:
Correct: When 3 and 4 are added, the result should be 7.

Alternatively, “you” may be replaced with “one”:
Correct: When one adds 3 and 4, one should get 7.

Incorrect: I believe this point of view is correct.
When one is permitted to express and opinion (only in personal or opinion essays), the use of “I” is still considered too informal; it may be replaced with “this writer” or “this author”.

Correct: This writer believes this point of view is correct.

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Ensure your sentence is not excessively wordy, particularly if the sentence has more than 20 words without punctuation, or more than 40 words altogether.

This sentence may be excessively wordy. Consider re-phrasing the sentence, or breaking it into smaller sentences.

People have very short attention spans; if too much information is presented all at once, the brain cannot properly process it. While there are no strict rules about length of a sentence, if your clauses are longer than about 20 words, or if your entire sentence is longer than about 40 words, it may be too much for your reader to clearly understand. If the reader has to go back and re-read too many sentences, they may just give up reading... and possibly fall asleep.

Incorrect: Thousands and thousands of wonderful people who have the environment's best interests at heart have thrown themselves into the cause of protecting this beautiful Earth from the detrimental effects of those irresponsible people who inhabit its every nook and cranny.
Grammatically, this sentence is correct. However, at precisely 40 words, it boggles the mind. In order that it not have more than 20 words without punctuation, the sentence would be best re-worded as two shorter sentences:

Many people have the environment's best interests at heart. These people are dedicated to protecting the Earth from the detrimental effects of those who inhabit its every corner.

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The determiner or modifier, “really”, is potentially unnecessary. Please ensure this word is required in your sentence.

Determiners and modifiers are required when making a specific point, but we often use them when they are not required, which makes for incoherent writing. Clearly identify the determiners and modifiers in your work, and remove the unnecessary ones. Look for words like “basically”, “sort of”, “actually”, and “really”.

Incorrect: At each place setting, there were individual name cards and personalised napkins.
As it has already been stated the cards and napkins are at “each place setting”, the word “individual” is unnecessary.

Incorrect: For all intents and purposes, I kind of wanted to take the day off work.
Rephrasing this sentence as “I wanted to take the day off work” is a more effective way of communicating.

Exceptions:
Correct: For all intents and purposes, she is a kind woman; her appearance makes people think otherwise.
Determiners and modifiers do have their uses. In this sentence, “for all intents and purposes” creates the conditional tone desired. As well, should you care to lend a formal or passive tone to your writing, wordiness may be an acceptable method of doing so.

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The determiner or modifier, “really”, is potentially unnecessary. Please ensure this word is required in your sentence.

Incorrect: For all intents and purposes, I kind of wanted to take the day off work.
Correct: I wanted to take the day off work.

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Ensure your verb tenses are in the proper sequence, particularly if the independent clause is in the past tense.

The dependent clause, “it is because I wanted to give all of my fans a place to come and hate me again because you really know I missed you”, may not use the appropriate verb tense. Clearly identify the past tense verb in the independent clause, and consider changing the dependent clause to agree with the independent clause.

Verb tenses help the reader understand in which order the action sequence happens (or happened). When the independent clause is in the past tense, the dependent clause may be written in the past, or possibly the present (see “exceptions”), but not the future.

Incorrect: The cat was bathing because his feet are dirty.
Because the tense of the independent clause is in the past (i.e. "was bathing"), the present tense verb in the dependent clause is incorrect. “Are” should be changed to “were”.

Incorrect: I thought I will go to the museum this afternoon.
Because the tense of the independent clause is in the past (i.e. "thought"), the future tense verb in the dependent clause is incorrect. “Will go” should be changed to “would go”.

Exceptions:
There are two exceptions to this rule:

1) for cases involving universal knowledge

Incorrect: Even the early doctors knew that the washing of hands prevents infection.

2) when using a modal which has no past tense form

Incorrect: Could you please help me move this bookshelf?

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The dependent clause, “it is because I wanted to give all of my fans a place to come and hate me again because you really know I missed you”, may not use the appropriate verb tense. Clearly identify the past tense verb in the independent clause, and consider changing the dependent clause to agree with the independent clause.

Incorrect: The cat was bathing because his feet are dirty.
Correct: The cat was bathing because his feet were dirty.
Exceptions:
Correct: Even the early doctors knew that the washing of hands prevents infection.
Correct: Could you please help me move this bookshelf?

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The personal pronoun, “you”, may not be appropriate for formal writing. Consider removing this pronoun, and rephrasing your sentence.

Formal writing should be impersonal, so personal pronouns – possessive or otherwise- are generally not used. Personal pronouns (i.e. I, you, we, my, mine, your, yours, our, ours) assume the information in your writing applies only to specific readers. By using impersonal pronouns (he, she, one, they, his, him, her, one’s, their), any reader may make their own personal connections to the information being discussed.

Hint: replace you, I and we with one, and replace my, mine, yours and ours with one’s.

Incorrect: When you add 3 and 4, you should get 7.
The personal pronoun, “you”, should not be used in formal writing.

The sentence may be rephrased so it remains impersonal:
Correct: When 3 and 4 are added, the result should be 7.

Alternatively, “you” may be replaced with “one”:
Correct: When one adds 3 and 4, one should get 7.

Incorrect: I believe this point of view is correct.
When one is permitted to express and opinion (only in personal or opinion essays), the use of “I” is still considered too informal; it may be replaced with “this writer” or “this author”.

Correct: This writer believes this point of view is correct.

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Ensure your sentence is not excessively wordy, particularly if the sentence has more than 20 words without punctuation, or more than 40 words altogether.

This sentence may be excessively wordy. Consider re-phrasing the sentence, or breaking it into smaller sentences.

People have very short attention spans; if too much information is presented all at once, the brain cannot properly process it. While there are no strict rules about length of a sentence, if your clauses are longer than about 20 words, or if your entire sentence is longer than about 40 words, it may be too much for your reader to clearly understand. If the reader has to go back and re-read too many sentences, they may just give up reading... and possibly fall asleep.

Incorrect: Thousands and thousands of wonderful people who have the environment's best interests at heart have thrown themselves into the cause of protecting this beautiful Earth from the detrimental effects of those irresponsible people who inhabit its every nook and cranny.
Grammatically, this sentence is correct. However, at precisely 40 words, it boggles the mind. In order that it not have more than 20 words without punctuation, the sentence would be best re-worded as two shorter sentences:

Many people have the environment's best interests at heart. These people are dedicated to protecting the Earth from the detrimental effects of those who inhabit its every corner.

" pid="3780" critical="true">

The determiner or modifier, “really”, is potentially unnecessary. Please ensure this word is required in your sentence.

Determiners and modifiers are required when making a specific point, but we often use them when they are not required, which makes for incoherent writing. Clearly identify the determiners and modifiers in your work, and remove the unnecessary ones. Look for words like “basically”, “sort of”, “actually”, and “really”.

Incorrect: At each place setting, there were individual name cards and personalised napkins.
As it has already been stated the cards and napkins are at “each place setting”, the word “individual” is unnecessary.

Incorrect: For all intents and purposes, I kind of wanted to take the day off work.
Rephrasing this sentence as “I wanted to take the day off work” is a more effective way of communicating.

Exceptions:
Correct: For all intents and purposes, she is a kind woman; her appearance makes people think otherwise.
Determiners and modifiers do have their uses. In this sentence, “for all intents and purposes” creates the conditional tone desired. As well, should you care to lend a formal or passive tone to your writing, wordiness may be an acceptable method of doing so.

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The determiner or modifier, “really”, is potentially unnecessary. Please ensure this word is required in your sentence.

Incorrect: For all intents and purposes, I kind of wanted to take the day off work.
Correct: I wanted to take the day off work.

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The personal pronoun, “you”, may not be appropriate for formal writing. Consider removing this pronoun, and rephrasing your sentence.

Formal writing should be impersonal, so personal pronouns – possessive or otherwise- are generally not used. Personal pronouns (i.e. I, you, we, my, mine, your, yours, our, ours) assume the information in your writing applies only to specific readers. By using impersonal pronouns (he, she, one, they, his, him, her, one’s, their), any reader may make their own personal connections to the information being discussed.

Hint: replace you, I and we with one, and replace my, mine, yours and ours with one’s.

Incorrect: When you add 3 and 4, you should get 7.
The personal pronoun, “you”, should not be used in formal writing.

The sentence may be rephrased so it remains impersonal:
Correct: When 3 and 4 are added, the result should be 7.

Alternatively, “you” may be replaced with “one”:
Correct: When one adds 3 and 4, one should get 7.

Incorrect: I believe this point of view is correct.
When one is permitted to express and opinion (only in personal or opinion essays), the use of “I” is still considered too informal; it may be replaced with “this writer” or “this author”.

Correct: This writer believes this point of view is correct.

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